(systemd service descriptions that is, not service descriptions in "man
configuration.nix".)
Capitalizing each word in the description seems to be the accepted
standard.
Also shorten these descriptions:
* "Munin node, the agent process" => "Munin Node"
* "Planet Venus, an awesome ‘river of news’ feed reader" => "Planet Venus Feed Reader"
That is, you can say
security.pam.services.sshd = { options... };
instead of
security.pam.services = [ { name = "sshd"; options... } ];
making it easier to override PAM settings from other modules.
